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"Abandon hope, all ye who enter here."

I have noticed a trend in LJ Idol which I admire.  More and more writers are submitting poems.  It takes great courage to write a poem.  So far, I have written only prose.  What kind of writer would I be not to attempt the grandest form of human expression?  I enjoy poetry, but I wonder, do I have what it takes to produce a poem, especially with so few days to write it?

A good poem soars above the literary landscape to the amazement of all, while a bad one can embarrass the poor author like nothing else.  Can I proudly write my name next to Yeats, Auden, and Elliot on the roll of poets, or will I fail utterly and suffer humiliations galore?  These are the questions that bedevil me, especially given the topic this week, which has resulted in a mess of ideas.

This does not seem like an auspicious start for a poem, but I have chosen this occasion to write not just any poem, but an epic in twelve parts.

Poetry comes in many forms – free verse, sonnets, odes, elegies, and more.  I have chosen the most admired of them all, the limerick.  I know, I know, the challenge is too great you say, but “go big or go home.” So, I submit my epic limerick, and dedicate it to my real muse:

The Coalition For Disturbing Metaphors
[livejournal.com profile] halfshellvenus.

The bar for poetry has now been set at limericks!

*     *     *     *     *     *

THE RESCUE

I.
My poor words are now locked in a jail,
With my Muse bound in chains down in Hell.
I have less than one week
Our survival to seek,
And collect enough votes not to fail!

II.
My lost Muse is a Venus so fair,
With red hair and complexion so rare,
A great beauty I deem
And the stuff of my dreams
To release her from Hell I must dare.

III.
The new entrance to Hell I shall seek,
Tricky Satan must change it each week.
Where will it be found?
A huge hole in the ground?
Or a cave in a mountain so bleak?

IV.
I fear a brave guide I shall need,
Who is strong, with sharp swords and fast steeds,
He will help me find Hell
And then come home as well,
With the Muse that I need to succeed.

V.
Who can help me the most is Sir Knight,
He’s a man not afraid of a fight.
The Knight says he can go
And will land many blows
To release my lost Muse chained so tight.

VI.
I will seek the old seer and then start,
A wise trip, the Knight says, on my part.
She will tell me, I know,
The best way I should go,
To find Hell and then rescue my heart.

VII.
Oh wise seer, help me start on my quest,
Which direction to Hell is the best?
“A pure heart’s all you need,
So go East on your steed,
To the country where no one is blessed.”

VIII.
In the East, they bow low to an Idol,
All those writers who are very tribal.
Sir Knight finds the lost trail
That they hid in the dale.
To approach is to be suicidal.

IX.
Now alone into Hell I must go
For no guide is allowed down below.
Through the vast fire ahead,
Is the Lord of the Dead,
And this Devil is now my sworn foe.

X.
The souls damned to great torture abound.
My lost Spirit, where can you be found?
Through this fierce fire and flame
I shall seek my fair dame.
'Though despairing, I search all around.

XI.
I have found her amidst all this pain!
A hard rock holds my Muse in thick chains,
To release her I know
Will be hard, yet I go
Break the lock, and I free her again.

XII.
My lost Muse is restored unto me
And next week, a new prompt I will see.
A fun story I’ll write,
If I work through the night,
And no poems, this I promise to thee!

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Date: 2017-03-28 08:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] i-17bingo.livejournal.com
Forgive me if I seem quite terse
My vocabulary has never been worse
But it was quite a deed
To read your LiveJournal feed
Which is now full of rhyming verse

Date: 2017-03-28 09:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rayaso.livejournal.com
A limerick for a limerick -- spectacular! And thank you for reading and versifying.

Date: 2017-03-29 01:33 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kschlotwrites.livejournal.com

::Clap Clap::

Love it!

Date: 2017-03-29 02:43 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lilmissmagic71.livejournal.com
WOOHOOOO. <3

Date: 2017-03-29 02:59 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rayaso.livejournal.com
Thank you!

Date: 2017-03-29 03:00 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rayaso.livejournal.com
I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Date: 2017-03-29 03:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] furzicle.livejournal.com
If you haven't read Bill Peet's children's books, you must. He is a great muse and inspiration for all such verse.

Date: 2017-03-29 01:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rayaso.livejournal.com
I haven't heard of Peet, but I will have to check him out. Thanks for the information, and for reading.

Date: 2017-03-29 02:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] furzicle.livejournal.com
If you haven't read Bill Peet's children's books, you must. He is a great muse and inspiration for all such verse.

Date: 2017-03-29 07:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mamas-minion.livejournal.com
Nicely Done!

Date: 2017-03-29 08:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rayaso.livejournal.com
Thank you!

Date: 2017-03-30 07:34 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] eternal-ot.livejournal.com
I loved it! Brilliant :D I wouldn't mind more poems from you. Superb :)

Date: 2017-03-30 01:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rayaso.livejournal.com
Thank you! That's quite a lot of encouragement, but I think my poetry well is running dry. I enjoy reading poetry, but at heart I'm a fiction guy.

Date: 2017-03-30 04:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bleodswean.livejournal.com
Ah-ha! Glad to see you branching out. Although....one must wonder how much a stretch FOR YOU a limerick actually is....No matter. At first....what with how "salty" some of the entries this season have been, I thought you might not only be penning poetry but also adding a dash of the ribald. Alas, no. Still, a fine rollicking adventure and Dante would be proud to have inspired such fare.

Here is a great resource for your future travels and journeys -

http://poetscollective.org/poetryforms/tag/aabba/

Date: 2017-03-30 04:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rayaso.livejournal.com
Don't underestimate the difficulty of the limerick! I followed the form of a classic limerick. Besides the aabba rhyme scheme, the "a" lines are nine syllables, the "b" lines are six syllables. The "a" lines are in trimeter (unstressed unstressed stressed), and the "b" lines are iambic (unstressed stressed). Thanks, Reader's Encyclopedia! I had to fudge one or two, but it's a lot like a crossword puzzle. What's a two syllable word that rhymes with "orange" with the accent on the second syllable and means "horse"?

As to salty, who knows? I doubt there will be any more poems, but a ribald tale might be fun.

Date: 2017-03-30 08:55 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lordrexfear.livejournal.com
I write no limericks
this is not my poetic way
although taught & trained
to tackle every which style
I refuse to be bound
by rules or conditions
Poetry is free
but so is tradition
Rhyming is fun
but broken meter
is better
to fuck with the words I say is a chore for no lesser

I admire your wordplay
Your skill and adept
at bringing forth new trials
tribulations and literal attempts
The Idol is clear, I feel to
allow multiple voices
especially from a single individual

Date: 2017-03-30 11:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rayaso.livejournal.com
Hah! Very clever, and a great Comment. I have no particular preference for rhyme/meter in poetry, but that's what goes into a limerick. There were times when substance was secondary to form, but that forces a different kind of creativity. And you're right, Idol is very accepting of different kinds of writing.

Date: 2017-03-31 10:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dmousey.livejournal.com
This sweet ode to your Venus so fair,
Brought a smile where none did today dare.
The happiness I gained,
Made my heart feel less pained.
I'm in debt to your comical flair!

It's miserably raining out today, and my sciatica is kicking me in the a** (ha!) And this really did bring a much needed smile. Hugs and peace~~~

Date: 2017-03-31 11:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rayaso.livejournal.com
A wonderful limerick that definitely brought a smile to my face! I'm sorry about the sciatica, and I hope you feel better soon.

Date: 2017-04-01 08:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sinnamongirl.livejournal.com
You knocked it out of the ballpark!

Date: 2017-04-01 11:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rayaso.livejournal.com
Thank you! It was more difficult to write than I thought it would be (I mean, limericks??), but it was a lot of fun.

Date: 2017-04-02 06:55 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] penpusher.livejournal.com
I was always of the school that said the more rules you have, the easier it is to write. It just automatically eliminates what it CAN'T be. So the tighter the structure, the more regulations you have to deal with, actually reduces the choices and lessens the complexity of what you might have done!

Not everyone agrees with this assessment, though!

Date: 2017-04-02 07:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rayaso.livejournal.com
The structure certainly reduces the possibilities, but sometimes the best word in terms of meaning doesn't have the right number of syllables/stresses or doesn't rhyme. Then you have to make significant changes. I found it very interesting, trying to make everything fit. Thanks for commenting.

Date: 2017-04-02 07:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] halfshellvenus.livejournal.com
Always happy to be your muse, though happier still to be rescued!

'Though this week I have taken a rest,
By next round I'll be up to the test--
Madly writing (or fighting?),
New strange notions providing,
No longer Hell's unwilling guest.

Date: 2017-04-02 08:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] roina-arwen.livejournal.com
With limericks you entered the fray,
Perhaps to live and write another day.
The Going not bleak,
If it's votes that you seek,
I shall assuredly cast one your way!

Date: 2017-04-02 08:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] marlawentmad.livejournal.com

It was fun to read your self-challenge!

Date: 2017-04-02 08:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rayaso.livejournal.com
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Date: 2017-04-02 08:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rayaso.livejournal.com
What a great Comment! I know that took some time and effort, so thank you many times over! Plus, I love your icon. It's very fitting.

Date: 2017-04-02 08:41 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rayaso.livejournal.com
This was wonderful!!!!! I loved the way it fit in with my Epic. It's a Coda! With my Muse rescued from Hell, I should be able to write more fiction. See what happens when you get chained to a rock?

Date: 2017-04-02 09:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fodschwazzle.livejournal.com
As your usual, I think you're having the most fun of all in this competition. Writing about a journey through hell, in limericks, reminded me of a book I owned once just enough to finally remember what it was called. The Five Minute Iliad and Other Instant Classics by Greg Nagan. In it, he does the "Inferno" part of the Divine Comedy entirely in limericks. Above the door to Hell it reads:

"COME THROUGH ME TO THE SORROWFUL CITY.
COME THROUGH ME AND FORGET ABOUT PITY.
EVERY LAST DOPE
MUST ABANDON ALL HOPE
WHEN THEY PASS ON INTO ETERNITY."

So it seems relevant to your interests. Your limericks here, however, are so fresh that it'd be quite alright if you did more poetry in the future.
Edited Date: 2017-04-02 09:03 pm (UTC)

Date: 2017-04-02 09:27 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rayaso.livejournal.com
I tried this once before and got an error message, so here goes again.

I do try to have fun, but sometimes it's spelled p-a-n-i-c or f-r-u-s-t-r-a-t-i-o-n. Thank you for including the limerick. I'm going to have to track that book down to see what else is in it -- it sounds wonderful!

Date: 2017-04-02 11:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] roina-arwen.livejournal.com
You're welcome! Icons r us, lol!

Date: 2017-04-10 09:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] adoptedwriter.livejournal.com
This is a winner!

Date: 2017-04-10 10:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rayaso.livejournal.com
Thank you!

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